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Thoughts of You

Oh, the thought of you caresses me,

your eyes seem to undress me.

I am naked in body and mind

 

You traveled my body with your own,

I thought you to be a clone

there seem so many of you

 

You called my name,

You whispered, “I love you”.

The words seem so far away

but you were in me

 

I know, because

I felt you –

I touched you –

I felt your face –

 

I did not hold back any longer,

and I collapsed,

from the climax of it all

 

I slept, just where you left me…

In your arms

— ladywriter, Aug 15, 2007

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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Wow

Intense poem Lady! Some very 'touch sensitive' imagery used here to make the reader actually feel what the poem is about- (I hope that made sense) - Nice Job!
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ladywriter

18 years 10 months ago

purplemoondoll

Thank you again and again. I am busy during the daytime, but will get on here more and read more. I've only been on the site since this weekend. I found it by accident. Keep reading as I will get more reading in today and will read yours and give a little commenting, (hee hee) ladywriter

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