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Drowning in my faults.

As I sit here and drown in my faults I think,

 I think about all the people that I have hurt and I drink,

Even though I got their respect that isn’t the fact,

 the fact still remains I still hurt them as I think back,

     So what should I do?

      Which should I choose?

      Will I win or loose?

But that’s not the quiestion in life,

I’ve done this more than twice,

I feel bad inside because of the look on my mothers face,

I feel like I have no place,

Im sorry, God only knows the pain!

I love you MaMa!

— dat_shady_chick_2007, Aug 14, 2007

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ladywriter

18 years 10 months ago

Dat shady

I love this and it is so sincere. When you write, I have a tendency to response with a poem that I have written that flows with what you are saying. Stay strong girl. ladywriter
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

You have talent.

I think that what a lot of the very best poetry does is take a very personal experience and write it so other people can feel it as their own. You do that. It is a great gift but don't get smug, it needs work, with respect, Jess

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