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Aug 14, 2007
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SILK AND DELIVANCE
rain hisses on the hot breath of ashphalt
collects on my smooth tanned arms
LORI written on my wrist darkens
the red heart over the "i" turns a bright crimson
the trees are singing with each new gulp
the lawns dancing with every thirsty drop
last night i dreamt of you
naked in my ams in those clean sheets
and neon room
your scars were vived blemishs on your
white opal flesh
speaking pain your eyes wept with ache
and hurt
we dove beneath the cover of addiction
waves of it crashing into us
knocking down the agonies
drowning us in bitter defeats
somewhere in the no mans land of broken
submissions we found each other again
fresh and new
the party of nights
of origings
and old beginnings
…O…
— orgami, Aug 14, 2007
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weirdelf
18 years 10 months ago
I felt vaguely uncomfortable with this
orgami
18 years 10 months ago
nothing to vacant
weirdelf
18 years 10 months ago
Then you are a better poet than I already thought you were
orgami
18 years 3 months ago
ghost of attempt
Calliope
18 years 3 months ago
Beautiful...
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