Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Ballad In A Graveyard

Behold my brother, MDG

Handsome, gifted, crazy

Living his days in drudgery

Thoughts unfocused, hazy

 

He takes his hat off in the rain

Looks down upon her grave

He sinks to earth in melting pain

Her life he could not save

 

He loved her then, still loves her now

Helpless as he sits here

She gave to him her lifelong vow

That he should never fear

 

Her going before him in death

He was the older one

He’d be first to draw the last breath

That promise, now undone

 

Leaves him lonely to start new life

He does not know how to

Begin afresh without his wife

He struggles to bow to

 

What he cannot comprehend –

Shorn of his beloved

Filled with a grief that never ends

Life? How can he live it?

 

Now he feels enraged, quite angry

Nothing’s fair about this!

So he sets out, mean and hungry

To try to make right this

 

Situation (aberration

Is more like it he thinks –)

To refuse death’s sad invitation

He shakes his head and blinks

 

For there, before him, standing tall

A shadow figure waits

From its petrified fingers fall

First closed, then open gates

 

One portal to the unknown days,

The other, portal past

He shifted back and forth his gaze

Then suddenly, he gasped

 

Through portal past he saw himself

Lost, grave side, deep in pain

And then that scene resolved itself

In pouring, golden rain

 

Through the portal of unknown days

He sees her peaceful face

And seeks to trust God’s unknown ways

On earth, in time and space

 

He decided not to fight it

Or beg his lover back

No need to undo or right it

He saw there was no lack

 

Her peaceful face shone in his mind

Her spirit touched his soul

His vision cleared, no longer blind

His heart was healed, made whole

 

The pouring rain lets slowly go

The earth that holds the grave

His mind fills up with Spirit’s glow

He’s clean, reborn and brave

 

He can now face his life alone

Until his time to die

He knows her soul’s not trapped in stone

She’s always by his side

 

He’s happy now, with many friends

Who understand his peace

He lost his need to make amends

Their love will never cease





— waterdragon, Aug 14, 2007

Critiques

P

purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Waterdragon

This is wonderful. He sinks to earth in melting pain - excellent! truly resonates. Good choice of title, excellent flow and rhythm and it tells a beautiful heartfelt story, Kaz
W

waterdragon

18 years 10 months ago

Thanks!

& your photo is gorgeous. I've added you to my buddy list, thanks for the invite!
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I am humbled

by your simple eloquence, depth of feeling and craftsmanship. Welcome back, I hope you get a chance to review/comment on others' works on the site before 'puterphobia sets in again, I know your thoughts would be greatly appreciated. This is not a personal request, I suspect you might find my irreverent and often profane works not to your taste, it is for the other poets on the site, (although I must admit to being interested in what you thought of mine) cheers, Jess
W

waterdragon

18 years 10 months ago

Irreverent and Profane? Cool!

You'll be quite surprised, I think, by the scope and variety of my subject matters -- I'll post one of a very different flavor, so you can see. I think I'll quite enjoy your works quite a lot! Peace!

Join Neopoet to leave a critique

Neopoet is a free community of poets who critique and support each other's writing.