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~ I Am All Seasons ~

 

I float high above the earth,

I travel the universe,

overlooking the ocean

and the sea

 

Parts of me has landed

on the open highway,

or an open field full of grass

you feel me; and you see me

 

When I become tired

of wandering, from afar,

I would land on your earth

just inches from where you are

 

At times I feel

I do not have a place,

to call my own

 

I feel I belong on a throne,

even though I roam

to and fro, high and low,

in and out, all about,

and the world does not belong

to me; so I roam

 

Help me find a place

to plant my feet,

a place to lay my head,

so I can rest, so I can sleep

 

I am the wind, sometimes I’m rain,

I cover you with snow

I’m the sun, I shine

I’m the moon I glow

 

— ladywriter, Aug 13, 2007

Critiques

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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Good rhythm and flow.

Your imagery paints a beautiful picture... Help me find a place to plant my feet, a place to lay my head, so I can rest, so I can sleep Reads like a song - lovely easy writing style Kaz x
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ladywriter

18 years 10 months ago

kazx

Thanks again. Seems the more you write the more you wonder where do you; get the words; the thoughts and the flow? It's a gift and an appreciated one. ladywriter
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

imperious or humble?

spiritual journey or allegory? Doesn't matter, works for me in any or all of the above. Beautiful and true. (don't like the italics, hard on the eyes) cheers, Jess
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ladywriter

18 years 10 months ago

weirdelf

I would lean more to the spiritual, being I am spiritual. AND no more italics, I aim to please everyone. Thanks for the kind words - ladywriter

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