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To jazz outside newtown cinema

The speakers of of the old cinemas defined my childhood.
Define who I am today,
and for what?
Early Hollywood profit.

A place where the women are
Diamonds; bought, sold and cut.
Where dirty men are kings.
Where (dispite popular belief)
we live alone in our shells

That echo only
our own voices

which are everything;
but are worth nothing.

only our qwn reverberated voices keep us sane
and the blood-meat pump
grinds away at the clock
like racists at a coalface
who make jokes about being black.

— HDGoodman, Aug 12, 2007

Critiques

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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Nice Work!

Liked this a lot - Watch the typing though - you have 'qwn' instead of 'own' in the fifth last line. I like the imagery you have used here to describe the characters - A place where the women are Diamonds; bought, sold and cut. Where dirty men are kings. Where (dispite popular belief) we live alone in our shells Kaz x
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 9 months ago

Never been there,

but I bet I could say I have and a few people would believe me for a minute,after reading this almost creepy piece,about the place. Thank You, Hugh Gotitso

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