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The Heart of America

It’s time to come out
to see the world and how ugly it is
bruises and scars exposed for us to see
by the time the sky above darkens to the deepest gray
till the ray of hope shines down on us
something unknown will be discovered
  As we look at this mess
and the dents in our hearts
the heart of America
will break and crumble
until there’s nothing to hold
heart of America
  it’s time to come all
to touch the marks we’ve made
to smell the chaos that haunts streets
by the time we lay
to the time we wake
something undiscovered will be known
 it’s time everyone
to gather around
to see the evil
to hear the evil
to watch evil grow amongst us
to overlook this place
this hell
that we call home

— Nessachick, Aug 10, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

A brave and passionate demand,

yes the theme is timely and relevant. And very well written. Just personally, I would like to see more explicit naming of the evil. Many of your fellow countrymen might see this as just negative. Name the evil, pin it in the spotlight of truth. cheers, Jess
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

Very Cool Vanessa

Time for a change of heart I think or to find a way to change it. I once wrote a story about peace, joy, creativity, choice and decision. I ran into trouble between choice and decision. I suppose the choices we have will always be there but the decisions we make are within our control. Nice Nice writing! Thanks, Mark

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