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Chasing Rainbows

Our tale’s unwritten, missed potential
Greets the dawn and fades away
A contradiction caught in silence
‘Will they, wont they?’ - let it play.

We kiss the stars and felt them tremble
Touching twilight, let it dance
So many games now lost in stalemate
‘Will they, won't they?’ – just a chance.

Trust and friendship, mixed with laughter
Soul mates now and ever more
As for passion, well I wonder
‘Will they won’t they?’ - are you sure?

Chasing rainbows, false perception
Mar the journey on to bliss.
We are too wrapped in imperfection
‘Will they, wont they?’ – did we miss?
 
Trouble is we’ve been and done it
Oh so many times before.
I could love you, then it falters
Will they won’t they?' – where's the door?
 
So here’s the challenge, if you’ll take it
Grab a pen and let it scrawl.
I'm sick of chasing shattered rainbows
‘Will they, won't they?' - it's your call.


— purplemoondoll, Aug 10, 2007

Critiques

Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

I drove under a rainbow today

it was quite nice. I don't think I ever saw one as wide as it was. Caps on the first letter makes this poetry even more pretty. This is really beautiful Doll!
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SLoEDdie

18 years 10 months ago

i love question poetry

enjoyed reading this piece it was great. you have great flow and choice of words in all your poems, maybe you could teach me some day :)
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

Second time

I like this even better if that is even possible - just so cool doll. Mark
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Rapsalot

18 years 7 months ago

Soul mate dairy

Wow like you have a soulmate. My soulmate is yet to be picked out. Because my last soulmate, supposedly we're soulmates, is a total prick and he turned into a pediphile. You write with a certain style that flows, keep writing. Rapsalot
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barbsdad2003

18 years ago

My answer?

Prob'ly won't. Thanx, Not-a-Cynic Chuck PS: You express here something so universal in the experiences of individuals of humankind ... Well said. Well put.
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purplemoondoll

18 years ago

lol thanks Chuck! Spot on -

lol thanks Chuck! Spot on - and I am really glad we did't continue the game, agreeing to stay friends and not blur the edges - enough said! He read this just before Christmas - heh heh and smiled. This is exactly how it was for twenty five years on both sides - lol I guess we finally sorted it out:-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

Kaz

Sounds like quite the emotional tug-o-war for a while there! The flow is smooth from beginning to end here. Your tweaking worked! Best, Ronda p.s. Congratulations on Evolution!
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years ago

Kaz

Your thoughts here on paper flow well and tell a beautiful story even if things didn't work out, [maybee to your bebefit] this was nicelt written~

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