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and soon
I shall cry
when I swim
alone
and remember
how
it was
when the
dolphins
welcomed me

— Lenny of Cohen, Aug 10, 2007

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chronecro

18 years 9 months ago

dolphins

Just curious - what exactly was it you liked about that poem?
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

I don't think Chuck is going to answer you

so if I may be so impertinent I will. It is perfect poetry in saying so much in as few words as possible. One (amongst many) requirements of poetry is "compression of meaning". Wouldn't you agree that this poem does that? I suspect you might revile against the use of the word "dolphin" as having become a symbol of lame new-agedness. But have you ever met one? Have you swum with one? Cliches become cliches because they are the best way of saying things, Shakespeare invented most of the ones in common use. And dolphins are the very best symbol of joy in life of a healthy planet. Don't get cynical before your time. Lenny's poem deserves to have been in the spotlight for longer than any poem I have seen on this site because he draws on honest archetypes, would you argue with a dolphin? cheers, Jess
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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Spot on

In every way - loved this. Cheers Kaz x
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

the word freeform

at the top of this beauty along with the copyright stamp at the bottom really takes a lot away from this Gem. (witholding vote for the time being) If you work on it at all in regards please let me know because the poetry is really a 5 so far as I am concerned but the poetry is not what I am only seeing here.
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

hmmm yes I see ...

it is a pleasure to read once again this beauty, Thaks so much for this Lenny, Mark
Mark

Mark

18 years 9 months ago

Mon Man

forgit the copywrite this baby should be FRAMED!
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

My eyebrows

raised up in surprised awe in this one. Not surprised at the writing, but at the symbolism of being vunerable in a vast seemingly endless and dangerous world and suddenly the friends that helped you muster the unknown, are gone. Once again Lenny, you had hammer in hand and whacked the sh*t out of the nail head! K. Mulroney
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chronecro

18 years 9 months ago

dolphins

What exactly was the feeling when you wrote this?
LC

Lenny of Cohen

18 years 9 months ago

A great

SHAME at what we've inflicted upon this innocent planet. Mother Earth regrets daily the day we set foot upon her beautiful stage, and what must the Animal Kingdom think of us ?! Delete Mankind and you will have PARADISE. Lenny