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Tears in Her Eyes
Tears In Her Eyes
She’s a bitter young girl with tears in her eyes.
The hurt’s kept well hidden deep inside.
She tries to pretend, but she can’t hide.
The hurt, the pain, the sad good byes.
She’s longing for the daddy of long ago.
He doesn’t know it, but she loves him so.
If only he would walk in and hold her tight.
She wouldn’t be crying throughout the night.
There was a time not long ago.
When her own daddy loved her so.
Things got bad between her Mom and Dad.
The fussing and fighting made her sad.
Tears fill those sad brown eyes.
At night I hear her mournful cries.
A broken heart of one so young.
I know it’s him who’s done her wrong.
She’s longing for the daddy of long ago.
She’s such a sad sweet girl, and I love her so.
She pretends he doesn’t matter anymore.
It would all end if he’d walk through that door.
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weirdelf
18 years 10 months ago
Really the raw truth?
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