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onisd23
Aug 10, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

HAVE YOU SEEN IT

HAVE YOU SEEN IT

By Alexander Duque

 

In green I’ve seen

DEPTHS

In green I’ve seen

DEATHS

In green I’ve seen

GREED

In green I’ve seen

LIBERTY

In green I’ve seen

SLAVERY

In green I’ve seen

POWER

In green I’ve seen

HONOR

In green I’ve seen

JUSTICE

In green I’ve seen

WELFARE

In green I’ve seen

DEMOCRACY

In green I’ve seen

INSANITY

In green I’ve seen

 FAME

In green I’ve seen

GLORY

In green I’ve seen

UNITY

In green I’ve seen

DIVERSITY

In green I’ve seen

HYPNOTISM

In green I’ve seen

GOD

In green I’ve seen

 HYPOCRICY

In green I’ve seen

TERRORISM

In green I’ve seen

WAR
In green I’ve seen

HEAVEN

In green I’ve seen

HELL

HAVE YOU SEE WHAT I SEE

OR

BEEN BLINDED BY GREEN

— onisd23, Aug 10, 2007
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Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

A brave experiment in structure

but I'm afraid it doesn't work for me. While I like minimalism this feels like reductio ad absurdam. Green ends up meaning nothing. I guess you are referring to American money being green, but what about the Green movement? While the use of bold caps works during the poem, the caps ending is try hard. If you can't say it without caps, you can't say it. Sorry to be so negative, just my personal take on it. Hhhm, reading it again a few more times I like it better, I guess it is very American. cheers, Jess
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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Question:

In the line under HELL, shouldn't it begin HAVE YOU SEEN rather than HAVE YOU SEE? Just wondering. Thanx, Chuck
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onisd23

18 years 10 months ago

thnks

hi chuck thnks yhea it should be "seen". have u seen what I see chuck or been blinded by green.. thnks chuck for d comments I really appreciate it. thnks, Alexander
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

I like this Alexander

Green was a song sung by Buddy Rich - yes it is true ! It can be a symbol of youth or being inexperienced. Well done! Write on ! Chuck - eyes of a hawk you have I missed that mis spell but we all know me lol :-)

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