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My Mama

 

 

She’s pretty, strong and oh, so smart.

I love my Mama with all my heart.

She’s sweet kind and sincere.

Always willing to lend an ear.

 

She comforted me when I was afraid.

When she came and chased my fears away.

She dried my tears and bandaged my knee.

My Mama means the world to me.

 

She was my comforter when I was sad.

She was my disciplinary when I was bad.

As a child, I was often over her knee.

Getting a spanking because she loved me.

 

When I married, she expressed her fears.

She stood beside me and held her tears.

Always cheering me on to be the best I can.

She said, "Don’t settle for just any man."

 

She was there when my children were born.

When my baby died, she helped me mourn.

I know she’ll be here for me ‘til the end.

I also know, she’s my friend.

 

She’s almost blind, but I know she sees.

My Mama means the world to me.

 

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— Sabrina_Manning, Aug 09, 2007

Critiques

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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Heartfelt

I enjoyed reading this - these lines in particular were extremely poignant She was there when my children were born. When my baby died, she helped me mourn. I know she’ll be here for me ‘til the end. I also know, she’s my friend. Speaks volumes about your relationship and tells a compelling story. Language use - I like your writing style only one suggestion here - I would maybe have gone for a wider range of vocabulary in some of the verses but then thats a personal preference and so please feel free to take on board or ignore as you wish! Look forward to seeing more - cheers - Kaz x
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shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

wow

so possitive so sad and so brilliantly written! shirley harrison

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