perfect

in a perfect world you’ll love me and never go away
in a perfect world you’ll always be here to stay

in this perfect world in my mind everythings alright
we never have to argue we never have to fight

you hold me close to you and whisper loving words in my ear
everything i hope for, is every thing i hear

i wish i could stay forever in this perfect world of mine
cause everything i wish for, is everything i find

but sooner or later i wake up and its nothing but a dream
cause this perfect world i wish for is not so real it seems

cause things are not so perfect when i wake up in the day
maybe i just make things turn out that way..

— randysmom2007, Aug 08, 2007

Critiques

Julie50

18 years 9 months ago

Loved this poem

I read it as the writer intended and it flowed like water falling from a fresh spring! I liked it because it took me away from this world right along with you! Even though we wake up at the end,wasn't it fun for awhile! And even though life isn't perfect it's ok to dream! Keep on dreaming,thanks for sharing! Julie

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