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Steps

 

Steps

Don’t say "Good Bye" at all
Nobody knows when to meet
Keep a door open in the wall
Fits your visitors’ feet

As we’re still breathing
And feet walk everywhere
Surely, we will have the feeling
That we can meet and care

Certain steps in a book
That we should go, no choice
I remember how you look
And your charming voice

In a lovely dream we met
In the windy storm left
Forever or for the best
Let’s see what is the rest

— benazouz, Aug 07, 2007

Critiques

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Prototype

18 years 10 months ago

hey

I like the picture you try to create, although I think you force the rhyme too much.
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poet_inside

18 years 10 months ago

Good work

The poem is nice. I will have to agree about the rhyming sound like your searching for the words. (that’s how most of my stuff comes out because rhyming is new to me) But it has a good story line to it. Brittany Rae

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