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OUR LAST GOODBYE

even though we are miles apart,

our hearts and our love will never part.

you came into my life as a friend,

and some how we became lovers.

we never thought we would ever have to say goodbye,

but the good lord made it out to be this way.

i never thought i would go this early,

but this illness came upon me with out any warning,

and then it took over the rest of my life.

you helped me get through some of my hardest days and nights,

you stood by me through all my pain and suffern.

you were so brave my love.

oh please baby, please dont cry,

for i am better off in the hands of the lord.

i promise you i will not cry,

and i will not suffer anymore,

for i have gone to heaven.

this is my last goodbye and my finale wish,

please let someone find a cure for all chronic illnesses.

— crazyrachie, Aug 06, 2007

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poet_inside

18 years 10 months ago

I loved the poem, very well

I loved the poem, very well put together. The title fits with the poem, language and pace was good, easy flowing. The theme is apparent, that sometimes its just not supposed to work out and everyone needs closure. Everyone needs that last and final goodbye.. I just posted a poem similar to this before I looked at the post. Good writing! Brittany Rae
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crazyrachie

18 years 10 months ago

thank you

thank you for the comment and thank you for letting me know about it being in caps, sometimes i forget. i have a couple of other poems i am fixing to share i belive you will enjoy them also. crazyrachie

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