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alone indefinately

come, walk with me on this beautiful transluscent water.
Lay with me beneath these heated copper mines, imbedded with shiny jewls.
aching from head to toe.
overcome by this slow rise and fall of slaughter.
Its tingling up and down this rachis; then out comes a buoyant fool.
Swimming against the borderline of time.
i try so hard to lavish in this firing pathetic fallacy.
I taste the sweet juice of burnished light and your infinite lime.
Rain and clouds are benevolently ominious, coming alive to pounce and feed.
Im walking alone on the icy water now.
Burnt by the sour taste of love, beneath the mines.
Im yearning for that tingle and blood of all thats foul.
Expectedly sitting alone now.
Im petrified of whats soon to come out of this apocalyptic, ruby red wine.
im lying alone on this timid surface now.
discomposure is here
cowardice develops within my frail bones.
Come with me to the other side of death.
Let me live through you and your trepidation
allow me to be prevalent and feel the water rise between my toes and beneath my breast.
Through your eyes, I am pure nullity.
through mine, we hum among the stones.
the siren is way too loud.
My disposition and lucidity are too deep to be congruous with your light.
All i want to do is lay beside you in comfortable fear, throughout this ominous night.

— anonymitylll, Aug 06, 2007

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weirdelf

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18 years 10 months ago

very surrealistically weird and cool.

Just my cup of tea. rachis sent me scurrying to my dictionary, effective use of it. Clever use of rhyme and structure to control tempo. Much more coherent than some of your other work. It would be better for me if you fixed some spelling, especially the title. Overall, thanks for the read, as we used to say in the '70's, dug it muchly. cheers, Jess