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Drive, Will & Choice.

I’m in love with two people.
I’m in love with no people,
I’m in love with myself

And heroin made him thin
And ice made her look sixty-five

And we love the night,
We love the night.

The Dichotomy:
To punch our life like a wholesome cigarette,
Or stay,
stay state of mind
still as,
still as.

But like;
Soft last shake of an abandoned
Bird’s nest,
As the littlest one takes flight,
And the soft bowl
of twigs and down
is left.
Sweet and dormant.

Pictures left over
Laywhispering in my skull:
Little ghosts rocking.

— HDGoodman, Aug 05, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Bloody hell HD,

this is great. Sensitive, thoughtful, streat savvy and sexy. And sad cheers, Jess
M

muttering_madwoman

18 years 2 months ago

Drive, will, choice, and is

nice vision, i like the view, and the feel. its got a good tempo, without seeming to have one at all. not choppy, but right and sliding along. i'll be reading more from you. good eye for the inner and outer, good voice for conflict that resolves through the words Niki

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