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Morning Mousie

‘Morning, mousie in the housie

Puss’s got the munchies

For yummy little crunchies –

You’d best be on your way

 

Rev ‘em up, your little pawses,

Cat’s relentless, never pauses

It’s just his nature and that’s because he’s

Been cravin’ mousie-pie all day

 

Little mouse, I’ve got a hunch

Puss-cat thinks your name is lunch

He’ll reduce you to a furry bunch

Of gristle, bones and clay

 

So, little rodent, if you’re smart

You’ll get yourself a good head-start

Pussie’s got his feline heart

Set on eating after play

— waterdragon, Aug 02, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

More than it seems

I love the playfulness and the way that obliquely highlights the cruelty. Gotta say, clay is a lousy rhyme there. cheers, Jess
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

p.s.

check out barbsdad on this site, he does some wonderfully whimsical stuff with more layers than an onion. cheers, Jess

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