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Crescent Waltz

She slants her shining, golden glance

Across desert, mountains, rivers, plants

Greets her rising, true romance

In the purpling, opposite skies

 

Her lunar love, her heart’s delight

Soars to ever darker height

For each, the other’s perfect, right

It’s on their wings time flies

 

She seems asleep within the night

Yet always, somewhere, she’s brilliant, bright

Motionless in constant flight

Each day its own surprise

 

They’ll never meet – there’s not a chance

These partners in eternal dance

Of darkness, light – they both enhance

The world with their long goodbyes

 

As their crescent waltz achieves crescendo

Without artifice or innuendo

Young children start to play Nintendo

While adults stir and rise

 

— waterdragon, Aug 02, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

A bloody near perfect poem

everything I love about poetry, lyrical language, unobtrusive rhyme, compression of meaning and even a sting in the tale. Lovely. cheers, Jess
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waterdragon

18 years 4 months ago

I'm so glad Andrew bombarded us!

Seems like I never got these august August comments! Nice to hear from last year something new this year! Cheers! and thanks! Reverend Bec Hudson Shine Your Light It's the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!

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