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Startled Grasshoppers

A floral blanket of silence

Lies out across the desert

 

Nothing moves-not air

Nor trees

       Nor blades of grass

 

The ogre’s breath is held

Suspended, then expelled

 

Stomping his feet,

Flashing his eyes,

Grumbling, the ogre

 

Blows

And, grumbling, cries

Fat sheeted tears –

 

Trees quickly bow

Shaken green heads as

The silent blanket erupts

In oceanic waves

Of startled grasshopper minions

— waterdragon, Aug 02, 2007

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waterdragon

18 years 4 months ago

Naive voice

is intended, glad it works -- this is actually one of the poems in my upcoming book, "Painted Poems (Portraits of New Mexico)" -- which should probably be published by, say, around the Ides of March? Thanks for your comments, and good to hear from you. Reverend Bec Hudson Shine Your Light It's the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!

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