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Enchantment

Come walk with me in soft enchantment.
See the Moon in changeling guise.
Silver now to blood red turning.
Cloaked, she waits ‘neath dark'ning skies.

 

Come dance with me in dark enchantment.
In wild abandon hear the song.
Dark desire and dreams are stirring.
Steadfast now we move as one.

 

Come sing with me of wild enchantment
‘Neath moonless sky within the green.
Call Her now before the firelight.
Magic holds you, soft, unseen.

 

Come sit with me in sweet enchantment
Till the spell is rightly done.
Raise the chalice, thank the Mother
Starve the fire and journey home.

— purplemoondoll, Aug 02, 2007

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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Wow!

I love this piece. A real gem. And so well written. Thanx, Chuck PS: Might be tempted to alter darkening to dark'ning at the end of the first stanza. The only other thing I'd choose would be till for your 'til. The dictionaries appear to agree there's no such word as 'til for until: It's always till for until. I know it's commonly spelled that way---that is, as 'til---but ... (Just another apparent oddity of English.)
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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Thanks Chuck!

Thanks Chuck! Have edited the piece to include your suggestions - very much appreciated! Best wishes - Kaz x
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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Whoops!

Close ... not quite there yet. Delete the apostrophe from your Till, and I'd be more than happy to post this edited one on my wall. Thanx for a delightful read. Yours, Chuck
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weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I love this

do you know the work of John Masefield? Reminds me of this. His poem "Jane" is an icon for me. "perfect in tune, in time and bringing, a deathlessness to mortal me" cheers, Jess
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

has a classic

incantational feel to it. Reminds me alot of a band out of Cambridge, Massachussetts named "The Moors." Half of their songs are in English, half in Gaelic and are very naturalistic. "Stand as one" feels a bit unsteady for me, but at 3:37 A.M. that might just be me right at this moment. Mark
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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Thank you!

I just returned from a lovely trip to find Enchantment and Within the Green have both been in the spotlight!! WOW cant tell you how chuffed I am - thank you! Kaz x
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washing tears

18 years 10 months ago

Well Done

I like this it has a good rhythm and flow to it. i dont realy know much about poetic stucture or anything but if i did i would say this was very well written, which even i can see that, and i dont know anything about that stuff... am i even making any sense? if-so-facto, it was a well written peice! Washington Fear
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Lenny of Cohen

18 years 9 months ago

Brilliant

Kaz, absolutely BRILLIANT ! I was in your spell whilst reading this beautifully weaved classic. Lenny
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purplemoondoll

18 years 9 months ago

Thanks Lenny

And everyone else for you lovely comments - have to admit this is one of my favourites! Kaz
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JulieMcCarty

18 years 9 months ago

I love this!

I love it, love it, love it! It takes me to a beautiful place in my mind. Thanks for stoking my imagination.