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Come In, The Wind Dancer (dedicated to Sandy Lynn Sacher, B.S.)

Come in, you wind, please, settle down

Must be quite tired, all that rushing around!

 

Tell me a tale – oh, come on, dear wind!

Tell me what you’ve seen, tell me where you’ve been?

 

Yes, please come in, wind, to tell me a story –

Whatever you speak of, I know will not bore me

 

You’ve flown over here, blown over there,

Visited places no one would dare

 

You’ve traveled so near, traveled so far,

Say, what is it like to touch all those stars?

 

You can drip like the rain, rush like the water,

Cool things way down or make them much hotter

 

You come on in, my dear, dear friend wind

Blow right through my soul, cleanse me deep down within

 

Then, take me with you as you go, I pray you dear wind

Carry me gently, pull me loose from my skin

 

Let’s dance windy waltzes as we swirl through the air

A lover’s embrace – feel the joy we will share

 

When our wind dance is over & you return me to human,

I’ll feel so much better, a much happier woman!

 

Yes, let us go then, wind, you and I

Throughout the galaxies let us spread wings and fly,

Across the blue, true dream of sky

 

— waterdragon, Aug 01, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

oh me oh my

I am glad you only posted two poems or I would run out of superlatives! I can't believe you have only been writing for 3 years. So accomplished! One little thing in this one. The stanza "You can drip like the rain, rush like the water, Cool things way down or make them much hotter" jars a bit, I don't think it's the half-rhyme, I think it is a slightly different tone to the rest. Maybe it's just me. Maybe I am quibbling. cheers, Jess
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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Great Storytelling

I love the imagery, language, theme, readability, everything.... Masterfully written.....I look forward to seeing more! Kaz x

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