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We Loved Him So (for brother Ron)

 A flame still burning deep inside why did you have to go?

We never thought it would be true, oh how we loved him so.

Why did you have to leave us, why did you have to go!

We asked the Lord to answer because we loved him so.

A cloudy day it truley was, the day we all stood round, then

suddenly the clouds did part and a sunbeam touched the ground.

And as we looked up at the sky, we saw by heaven’s grace, nestled

in the scattered clouds, there shown our mother’s face.

The Lord had  truly answered, our healing can begin.

We’ll cling to one another, tell we gather round again.

                                                                                    Judith

— Judith, Jul 31, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I sorry for your loss

and know the feeling. This is hard to say and perhaps I should be silent but that niggling voice of integrity in my head just won't let me. I just don't get the ring of poetry in this. I am sorry. Just my honest gut reaction. sorry, Jess

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