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Thank you lord

I thank the lord for the day when he brought you into my life,changing my life,my destiny and give me new life ,so if you have someone special that always bee true show love and take notice in every thing the do.I could never take for granted and what he did for me.Hes the type that well never  let you down helping me find the light when no one came around,down when i was broke,down when i had money.

So if i die tonight hold me tight and don’t ever let me go.I guess you can say I owe my life to you,the only dream that really matters is to be with you.

Ive given love to the one thats been by my side ,you’ve been so true thats why  the feeling i have inside i well never hide.I thank you for being down to ride.

 

— ESA_X, Jul 31, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

honestly ESA_X

this is lovely in its honesty and sincerity but nothing at all new. I humbly suggest you read some of the classic poets, or even just the poets you like on this site. No point saying what everyone else has said, no matter how new and urgent it is to you. Would really like you to post more of your work, don't take my opinion on this one. cheers, Jess

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