Stranger in the Mirror

The enemy within

is finally here,

the one you need to blame

is the stranger in the mirror. This shadow of yourself

of which you should have fear,

has caused all this to happen

this stranger in the mirror.

You’re not the same person

for reasons still unclear,

you’ve taken the wrong journey

with the stranger in the mirror.

From all the mental junkfood

to the things that you hold dear,

your vision has been clouded

by the stranger in the mirror.

You need a set of principals

to which you can adhere,

then maybe you can turn away

from the stranger in the mirror.

— docmaverick, Jul 31, 2007

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

good concept

but it needs work. "the stranger in the mirror" is repeated six times, including title and that seems to flood the rest. I'm gonna go out on a limb here and suggest that one way it might work better is instead of blaming the stranger in the mirror, find the reasons he became a stranger, you were on track there with "From all the mental junkfood to the things that you hold dear, your vision has been clouded" Hope this helps. cheers, Jess