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The Mice

(after Georg Trakl)

after Georg Trakl

Into the brick abandoned house the tired mice run.
Curious slivers of moonlight peek in.
Icy wind scatters pages of black leaves
From an old Bible left on the floor.

Pink bellied and starving, they devour Acts 2:1.
A percussion of white squeaks begin.
In the demolished ribcage of dirty brick,
Their eyes shine like dogs in wet moonlight.

Smoke belches from their little mouths:
Pained and pentecostal, they know truth.
He watches from a broken window upstairs.
Damp echoes, footsteps, move slowly down.

The mice chase him as I reach a splintered landing.

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

Hey quill

I am certain other people will get a better, deeper read of this than me. While I like it and appreciate it, worked at it, even looked up Acts 2:1, it leaves me a little cold. Maybe it's supposed to. Sorry, not always your most perceptive reader, cheers, Jess
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Quillsvein1

18 years 9 months ago

yeah

it is a mood piece more than anything else, something written in the vein of poet georg trakl (y'know, i think i might post something of his on here.) different strokes for different folks, as they say. best
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 3 months ago

Act 2:1 ?? The speaking in tongues passage?

Nicely woven in with the mice suddenly starting to squeak. This is an awesome piece. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"And he talks to the river of lost love and dedication And silent replies that swirl invitation Flow dark and troubled to an oily sea A grim intimation of what is to be" - Pink Floyd
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Conect11

17 years 3 months ago

I don't think the world

deserves your writing, quills. Incidentally I'm in the Acts class at school right now, so I got a smile reading this, with its cursory reference to Acts 2. thanks! Mark W.