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Jul 30, 2007

Voices from nowhere

Night has fallen, I hear you calling, Where might you be?   Are you here? Are you there? Are you anywhere? Please answer me.   The wind speaks     And Your not with me.   Minds erased, Non embraced, Do you see me?   The stars have spoken,  Figurines, What do they say? What do they mean?   I do not bleed, Nor do I hurt, Behind the door, A crumbled earth.   Night has fallen, I hear you calling, Where might it be?   Dominique Jorgensen  
— amysticmoondance, Jul 30, 2007

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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

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lyrical meter and rhyme scheme remind me alot of poems I wrote when I was 18 - 19. Lot's of longing and love, with a tinge of sadness. Might want to look at grammer a touch, but heartfelt and sincere. Mark
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amysticmoondance

18 years 10 months ago

I am laughing

Yeah I wrote this when I was in my late teens. lol Although I write simple in my opinion. Total naked truth is I am a horrible speller,formating sucks,and if it wasn't for underwritters and editors I don't know what I would do... and yes I have took workshops and college... no helping it, it comes naturally Haha Favorite t-shirt(Bad Spellers of the world untie!) Well I think it is funny. Thanks agian Dominique

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