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SHOW MY PATH

                                                             SHOW MY PATH

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Iam totally confused and with tears

cause there is a call from  the old hell  and

 the threat from my new heaven

Where i will have to go? to remain in heaven

or to go to the old and nasty hell

I t is  a question screwing my mind.

Though iam solid and strong in state

My mind wavers and keeps me in fear

Though the Lord is so kind enough to me

The order from the hell to strong er than  His love

With full of frestations ,I decided to go to hell

to avoid all confussions  and worries

Is it correct? show my path . Dear!

 

SAKTHI RAVICHANDRAN    AN INDIAN ENGLISH POET

 

— SAKTHEEE2007, Jul 30, 2007

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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Ravi:

"A question screwing my mind" is great writing. The whole piece suggests great struggle---both in the writing of it and in your challenging dilemma. Regards, Grandpa
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SAKTHEEE2007

18 years 10 months ago

ANY THING WRONG IN THIS POEM

DEAR GRAND PA HAVE YOU FEEL AND FOUND ANY INCORRECT APPLICATIONS IN THIS POEM ARE IS IT SEEMS TO BE CHILDISH NEED YOUR SUGGESTIONS PLEASE
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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Ravi:

I think the piece as is is consistent with a dithering state of mind, which I think's appropriate in this case. Yours, Grandpa