To see me now

To see me now
(I look a bit like Lenny and Orgami)
you wouldn’t know
I was once a punk,
coloured spiky top
rude and obnoxious
(some things don’t change)
I regaly got chucked out of sleazy punk dives.
I invented a dance
called “The Evasion”
I simply fell
in opposite direction to the bouncers…

I look different now.
My hair is long,
I have amalgamated hippy with punk.
I have both hippy and punk mentees
we call them ferals.
Even a few goths.
A grandfather of style
who was never stylish.

And I dig it.

— weirdelf, Jul 28, 2007

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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Critiques

poet_inside

18 years 10 months ago

:)

A little bit of a lot of things all rolled into one I totally relate I love it!!! Its a great piece its a little like you were discribeing a bit of me!!! I really liked it and enjoyed it!!!! Thank you for the smile on my face!!! Mad Love Brittany Rae

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

thanks Brittany Rae

sometimes I feel like an old fart, at others like Peter Pan, the boy who never grew up. I am more than twice your age but I know we have experienced similar things. cheers, Jess

Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

it's

funny because I see alot of myself in this poem. Not in the literal, but in the evolution of a human being. Perhaps our look, our clothes, our worldview are no more than our chrysalis; the silken threads that protect us while we metamorphose into something else entirely. I used to wear nothing but black, had earrings, long ghostly white hair and wear doc martens. I thought I was deep. Now I wear what I'd say the average father wears, am "boring" and have a nice bit of a gut I'm trying to shave off. But you know what? I have the intangibles now I never had back then: happiness, wisdom, (I hope, please don't think I'm trying to have an ego trip here, just trying to use these words to relate to myself at 18) and sensibility. Now for the poem anything that is able to evoke thought feeling and response in me obviously I think it is articulate and well made. Just check spelling and grammar here and there. Mark

purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Recognised myself

Albeit in female form! This really made me chuckle - especially this bit A grandfather of style who was never stylish Not quite ready to be a grandma yet lol - but I know where you are coming from. The poem was really really well written and flowed well... apart from some typos. all in all gets my vote - thank u Kaz x

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

ta people!

I wonder about "regaly". I first went to write "regularly", abbreviated it for punk and stumbled across this, which sounds more like something regal, which we always took the piss out of anyway. cheers, Jess

Rottiestyl

18 years 10 months ago

Style

is a state of mind. I was a teen in the mis 70's. I wore my own style, spoke my own phrase and gave no signs of caring who liked it or not. I still wear bellbottoms (yes, that is the "flairs" real name) and always will. Not to be stylish or up to date, but because i can. Loved this one Jess. Your stuff is as simple and complex as it gets. I go away from here always thinking about your work. You have the gift of turning the norm to excellence. K. Mulroney

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

thanks Kim

that is high praise indeed and especially appreciated coming from you, cheers, Jess

RSScheerer

18 years ago

You've created

your own niche - it is all yours and no one could fit in there with you. Little insights like these make working my way back through these pages worth every second. Best, Ronda