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RandomThoughts
Jul 27, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Manly Man/ Lovely Lady

Worlds emerged togther. Which do you chose? He fights like a man. Looks like a lady. Striking. Stunning. Magnificent. Making men fall to their knees. Stealing pride with every glance. Hated because he’s so lovely. Hated for the difference between him and the other boys on the baseball team. Loved because he’s so real. Never hiding the real girl inside. Letting her roam free. He lets her be seen for all to judge. Judgement can never confine her. Intense glares. Hypocrisy can’t with stand his beauty. Never caring bout what they think. Strong as an ox. He won’t let them pull him down. Gently his voice echoes. Polite and pleasant. He captured my friendship. Never ashamed of him. Seeing him for what she really is. Loving every moment we divide. Forever linked together.
— RandomThoughts, Jul 27, 2007
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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

poem

I like this alot. You've got some awesome visual here of the guy "all the other guys like to hate." You know who this reminds me of? Grady Sizemore of the Cleveland Indians. I love him since he plays for the Tribe, but if he played for anyone else I'd hate his guts. Cause you know, I'm the typical unathletic never done nuthin' man, lol! Fabulous way of bringing that jealousy across. Mark W.
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amysticmoondance

18 years 11 months ago

I don't want it to end

I enjoyed Manly Man although I feel the title, it doen't work for me. Put at the same time I can't think of a better one. Also I didn't want it to end it felt like so much more could express this lovely manly man. I wanted to know more. I felt like I began a friendship that ended too quickly.

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