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sub hero's

 

 

throw on that ragged camel hair jacket and head out

wind throwing snow in my night-face

fingers digging for spare change for the bistro

"aha!"  i feel that silken smooth luxury of money

 

lurid plows thunder past throwing slush like

great pawing bison

my socks are soaked but im delighted and happy

my shirt stale my pants need hemming

BUT who cares!!  I am a RICH MAN

 

such sweet chocolate eyes

she takes my crumpled note and drops

change like burning stones into my fingers

comb or brush my hair??  whatever reason??

those treacherous gusts

my nose ring pinchs from the frost

as i thaw my palms on the hot ceramic

 

mind swirls

Cizaranno Black Russians

i look into the patterns of the Formica

check the ceilings reflections in my

cup

 

the library will be open in an hour

FREE INTERNET

write in my diary

get lost in a book

 

in the end

i walk around the frozen strait of

the watertront

daring the damned wind to

freeze me

jacket undone

 

past the train yards of rumbling

deisels

deliriously happy

 

suns just a greasy thumbprint

..O..

— orgami, Jul 27, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

oh gush

I will embarrass myself if I say everything I love about this. It's got the raw street truth I love (I think Bukowski would have liked it) along with elegant poetic expression. (enough, Jess, calm down, you will give him a big head) damn! thought I spotted a typo to bring you in line, now I can't find it. Title works. cheers, Jess
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orgami

16 years 5 months ago

my shoes are falling apart

winter leaks in with its brother sand sister frost tickles my ankles and nose pinchs an earlobe the suns a golden bowl of humourus reason and the deep promise of nights glutton of stars breaks through like static on the tube set there is delicious decadence in its grip that sifts through the insufficient clarity of insulation it is hauntingly suffice that I feel invisible and vaporous as my breath when the last of the light peirces the archaic chill and night draws down her fingers with cold pleasure *ode to the ice queen my favourite story

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