A Guy's Perspective

did you have to get ironical, or was it a touch mysogynistical? Were you perhaps a tad angry with some female personage at the time? If all these things were truly intentional perhaps you could give us a little hint as to what made you feel that way at the time? Or re-write it more appreciate of the polarites referred to. The last two lines are downright smug and arrogant. What saves it is "So to me you seek advice on the male intellect. What a misnomer! As if I had the slightest clue." cheers, Jess

Heh heh I really like the way you have written this - it could almost be my dad talking here! Loved the title, language used, rythm and pacing were good, and the theme did appeal (and I am a bit of a feminist at heart) Very well written and a pleasure to read... Kaz x

Your piece loses consistency near the end. A rewrite there I think could improve on what you have. Otherwise a fine write. Perceptions and sensitivities of high quality and sharp intensity prevail earlier. Might as well keep them going. Applauding, Chuckles PS: Incidentally, I suspect your second "From my perspective" was intended to say "From your perspective." (Or perhaps the reverse.) This being an educated guess that may be off the Mark.

I am biased to really liking this poem from the getgo because I tire of feminism in academia and the Lifetime TV ("THAT MAN IS A DOG") attitude of many involved in contemporary poetry. (Adrienne Rich would be a good example). Maybe we need a new school of poetry, Maleinism? Who knows. Anyway, this was a refreshing read.

I am biased to really liking this poem from the getgo because I tire of feminism in academia and the Lifetime TV ("THAT MAN IS A DOG") attitude of many involved in contemporary poetry. (Adrienne Rich would be a good example). Maybe we need a new school of poetry, Maleinism? Who knows. Anyway, this was a refreshing read.

done a really wicked, unacceptable thing, expect to get highly censured for it. Merged this verse by verse with Rottiestyl's "Vain Agony" and emailed it to both. Await their reactions. (I might hide behind a handy rock) cheers, Jess

I'm joking. Seriously Mark. . . I have to be honest and say that I could rip this apart with much glee, I might add if I didn't like you! The writing is wonderful. The content is like Jess's last poem, willful and defiant. Although I don't think it was meant to be. But so what if it is. Your a guy and this is your thought. In the verse: So to me you seek advice on the male intellect. What a misnomer! I being the female that I am would say that verse does not belong because male intellect would be an oxymoron, but if I say that then I stir up all KINDS of battles. WHAT I mean by that is simple. In my experience, the male intellect consists mainly of me, me and maybe me. It's not your fault though. Men are visual creatures where females are the intellect. Not meaning "smarter" meaning we demand the talk. The "feelings" Example: " Honey, I bought that blue shirt you were eying the other day." You say "thanks" she walks away pissed off. You stand there, shirt in hand not having a clue what you just did. The point? You got the shirt you wanted but in all your maleness did not buy because wasting time in stores and the "shopping" arena is not your thing. She bought it, you say thanks and now she's mad (the spider web?) What she wanted you to THINK was "wow honey, in your busy day, you stopped and were thinking of me." Women are not complicated, they want to be acknowledged for more than what they look like on their back and/or knees. As for the poem? Snippy, real, arrogant, simple, to the point, and out there to take it or leave it. I take it because men are not simple, you just think you are! And it makes me smile. I truly loved this Mark, but I still say it has nothing to do with my poem Vain Agony. As I told Jess, that poem was about one female friend having had enough of another female friends selfish crybaby bullsh*t every time her love life goes sour. So there you have it, lesson one on male vs. female. K. Mulroney