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purplemoondoll
Jul 24, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Within the Green

Within the Green, owl serenades the night.

Moon Travels soft shoe, silver bright

Always slow

Beneath the shade her spirit calls

With silent whispers to the night

All is calm

Soon dead to the wings of dawn

Broken and forgotten in the waking morn

Cock crows

Voiceless, none care to hear his cries

Owl hunts anew through empty skies

 

 

 

— purplemoondoll, Jul 24, 2007
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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

A beautiful, lyrical voice

the line "Moon Travels soft shoe, silver bright" is magic! Overtones of GM Hopkins. Look forward to more of your work. cheers, Jess
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barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

Nicely Done

You have a piece here that reveals major talent. Thanx and regards, Chuck PS: I'm an amateur, too. If we don't hang together, we'll surely hang separately. All right. Sometimes I try too hard to be funny. I know, I know. It must be my advanced age trying to tell me something.
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purplemoondoll

18 years 11 months ago

Thank you

Thank you both for your comments! A real confidence boost! I was trying to capture the atmosphere of the woods and how that changed dramatically as dawn broke and the magic was gone! Barbsdad - heh heh please dont ever apologise for trying to be funny!! its what makes the world go round!! Thanks again Kaz x
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orgami

18 years 11 months ago

wing of silvered silence

ah i remember the owl from once long ago i worked in the country and at nights from my bedroom would hear such owls your poem is magical and my heart skipped a beat thank you
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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Thank you!

I just returned from a lovely trip to find Enchantment and Within the Green have both been in the spotlight!! WOW cant tell you how chuffed I am - thank you! Kaz x Kaz x www.freewebs.com/purplemoondoll www.freewebs.com/norfolkpoets
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

The woods at dawn

This is really a beauty Doll! I love the woods and this is just so sweet and true. Thanks, Mark

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