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Tears of Goodbye

The ballrooms lit by candlelight

As the people fidget and rustle in red velvet pews.

The hushed sound of whispers echo

Then the abrupt silence soon follows

As she gracefully enters the room.

His mouth drops at her entrance.

White flowing gown

And hair twisted back

Brandishing a nervous smile

he had grown to know all to well.

She was so close now

Close enough to touch

But no…

Its not your hand she grabs

As her fingers entwine with another man.

Catching your breath

You force an awkward smile

After all you knew this day would come.

And here you stand saluted

A ‘faithful’ friend

His best man.

Somewhere in your ears

were the distant verse of vows being exchanged

But your mind was to busy concentrating on the past

And what again would never be.

Two summers ago

Alone in your room

Another argument broke out

And in your harms she

Found solitude.

Summer turned to winter

And soon you were both

Huddled next to the flame

You told her you loved her

That night….

But what you wished to happen

Never came.

Snapping back to present

You met her hesitating gaze.

She was waiting for your queue

When the preacher says

‘Does anyone object?’

But deep down you knew

You cant take away his happiness.

This is it.

This is the end.

The children she bear

Will never once call you dad.

You’ll live your life bitter and alone

As you watch her grow old from a distance.

The people were cheering now

And congratulations were in order.

Looking at you teary eyed she bit her lip and sighed

But they weren’t tears of happiness…

They were tears of goodbye.

— Alijandra, Jul 23, 2007

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poet_inside

18 years 11 months ago

Awwww how lovely a read. My

Awwww how lovely a read. My my here is a really good poem, I felt as if I was sitting in the room watching her come in, I felt my heart start to break as you went on, This poem is amazing!!! Great Job!!! Brittany
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Quillsvein1

18 years 11 months ago

Loved

that line, "As the people fidget and rustle in velvet pews"--nice.
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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

could have

gone trite, and I suppose in a small way it did. But in a bigger way it has the opportunity to be powerful and alive in tackling a pretty cliche subject. I have minor, minor, minor issues with some grammar but overall a very well written piece. One of my favorite songs that you may want to check out on this subject is "American Wake" by Black 47. It's expanded a little from this situation and is the story of an Irish immigrant to the U.S. who goes back home years later for a visit and sees the woman he had left behind now married and with children. Definately check it out if you get time. Mark
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orgami

18 years 10 months ago

tears of goodbye

well lucky enough to see these but not at a wedding just as a kid with a truck but she in my life went on to have kids and that big warm house and profession at the time she was a high school valedictorian and i was just some punk in art class who could read i think about her though as i guess we all think wow nice poem all the what if's and feelings I enjoyed reading this i was kind of hoping they would hook up again but life moves on and there is a time for love and then there is a time for marriage ..O..

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