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cistern

 

 

frozen in their clot

corroded

layered and holding fast

my cistern pennies

 

hard luck comes fast

burns cold like a winter sun

 

the phone was full of grass winds

when you said your moving phrases

slow and mournful came the knowledge

that you would be going on

 

walked long those hours under lamps

and hours out of town

stars stretched everywhere

like a drums skin

my beat

my agony

 

took my shoes off and walked

the warm smooth ashpalt

tears spilling into darkness

 

dawn found me chilled

and worn

heartbroken and lonely

 

mile 42

 

..O..

— orgami, Jul 21, 2007

Critiques

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Quillsvein1

18 years 11 months ago

You

are clearly a master of the image and quite a poetic personality to boot--I wonder if these poems are as effortless as they look? I imagine not! Great job
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orgami

18 years 11 months ago

poem tumbles like windrift snow in a nights storm

remember them in cold grips of January windows rattling and wires howling tucked under blankets with Bears Bottles or Mate Bunnies or Pets the camp the cocoon the shelter the lair the den the cave I write these poems they come from somehwere from collected works famous and unknown from half dreamt soundtracks and radio hosts conversations on the evening train destination they come easy now long long ago i cried at my electric with crisp white sheets my poems horrid like shrapnel stunted and unloved filled garbage bags full of them like white empty skins clean of colour of feeling of experience then something happened it started to form i got older more settled more at peace yet my writing is full of conflict sometimes such odds i shouldnt doubt myself i am glad you like my poems that complete strangers can now read what i once threw away it never fails to amaze me that people can find love in words that power is in comprehension such as this freeform worked so hard to be able to sculpt them and keep them moving the challenge and purpose is to keep them moving from me to build a body of work its what i admired about poets who were published and famous they had a rythymn what would a forest be with only one tree ??..O..
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purplemoondoll

18 years 11 months ago

Effortlessly crafted

Or it would seem so. Flows beautifully and doesn't miss a beat. 'the phone was full of grass winds, when you said your moving phrases slow and mournful came the knowledge that you would be going on' Very poignant and well written! Thank you! Kaz x

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