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lonely

If today could speak,

if yesterday weren’t a dream,

if the future weren’t a vission,

i would have poured out my pains.

if my eyes could understand

that distance and time makes  the stand

which only the rythym of life stands;

i would have gone to meet my destiny.

If only my pains knew my grieves,

if only today weren’t brief;

if only the bridges to my dream could be reached

i would have been a king with that living kiss

— ellisville, Jul 20, 2007

Critiques

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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

if only

you definately do walk the line here, but you do so magnificently. I love the pace, the feel of this. Might want to check spelling a bit, rhythm and vision in particular. Can't wait to see more of your work. Mark

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