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Light

The light in my heart

It has been there from the start

The love you gave me

It gives me strength

When it is dark

All I have to do

Is let you in

Theres no other

Just you baby

Can’t you see

Your the love

Love of my life

I’ve got no worries

Because you wished them away

I love you

More then you can ever understand

You are that light

The light in my life

No longer am I afraid of the dark

My heart

Beats just for you

You are my light

All through life

— poet_inside, Jul 19, 2007

Critiques

C

Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

creepy

my screen actually went dark while I was reading this... oh?! Poem?! *pats Brittany on the head* it's...just...lovely... is she gone? you're sure? ooooh, this is bad sex here :( more Hallmark and butterflies. I know she's got better stuff in her, I've seen it. Mark
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

I disagree with Mark on this

although it seems sentimental and a bit cliched I think there is a simple, honest declarative quality that redeems it. cheers, Jess

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