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Of Steel And Splintered Ties

The looks of these linear tracks
deemed jagged, rusty, splintered
and tired are railroad ties
none the less bonded to these
old worn tracks…

Many a mile and many a folk have
traveled down these hardened rails
Every screech and rattle of steel
on steel a memory, a dream of a boy,
a man, his spirit, his life on these
old worn tracks…

Be it fond memories of the proud engineer
who displays a farmers tan created solely
on one side of his beefy frame riding these
old worn tracks…

With a salty smile, a hearty tug on his whistle
he trudges galiantly toward his destination
guiding his wares on these old worn tracks… 

Intuition his best guide through
darkest mountains around treacherous
curves, shaking tiny villages from
their foundations, two hundred cars
one by one galloping these trusted
old worn tracks…

Home now as he stumbles to find his
bed, clickety clack,clickety clack
slumbering dreams of his long day
on his old worn tracks…

    
    Christine E. Wessels
         06/24/2007

— workingharleylady, Jul 19, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

this is very beautiful Christine

it could only have been written by someone who works and has great compassion. I love your simple yet elegant use of language. So glad you came to NeoPoet. I know it was not your intention to flood but while we work our way through your works I eagerly anticipate your input on other peoples works here. cheers, Jess
Rottiestyl

Rottiestyl

18 years 11 months ago

nicely done

After reading this I got the same sensation I think the subject would have after a long haul like I used to get after being out on our boat for hours. Sitting in the easy chair still feeling the waves tossing me back and forth. I agree with Jess, simply worded and powerful. K. Mulroney

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