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Lonely

A friend need me i as i gazed at the sun. so mad was he when the moon smiled i wondered why   he’s gone! who? My heart is cold my love’s sold am waiting by the shore my thoughts are gone with the flood   A sweet painful monster called loneliness after much stress is trying to make me less what manner of rest do poor me deserve?   lonely am i without anyone to brighten my smiles my fate is in the fog am so lonely and wishing that i wasn’t    
— ellisville, Jul 19, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

A sweet poetic voice

and some beautiful images and expressions "as i gazed at the sun. so mad was he when the moon smiled" is wonderful. thank you cheers, Jess

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