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A Travel in a city bus [DELAY]

      A   Travel in  a city bus               [DELAY]

  It is the time of nine  morning

with a hurry and sweat  i get in

It is already overflow with passengers

My inclusion adds more problem to others

there at the moment gives whistle to move

It slowly moves instead of running

stage by stage decrease and increase it’s tickets.

With a lot of patience  i am waiting to reach my stage

at last it reached  that stage as an achievement  in its service

when i reached my office

there the clock strucks eleven

 

Sakthi Ravichandran   indian english poet

 

 

— SAKTHEEE2007, Jul 18, 2007

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HDGoodman

18 years 10 months ago

maybe you should check your

maybe you should check your spelling before you post man, you seem to have a good command of the language, i'm assuming it's your second?
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barbsdad2003

18 years 10 months ago

Ravi:

Please don't worry overmuch at this stage of your pennings over misspellings and mispunctuations ... lest you inhibit your manner of writing. To point a broader finger, people nowadays virtually anywhere in the U.S. are sorely lacking in those same skills. And most hold (American) English as their first (and only) language. It's OK to be careful, but don't let overconcern about such details cramp your style, which is delightful. In truth, I find your partly broken English unaccountably endearing. Yours, Grandpa