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LC
Lenny of Cohen
Jul 16, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Play Time

its about time

lets bring it on

and erase the white line

 

 

release the lunatics

from the asylum

 

 

its the right time

for them to run,run,run

the whole damn show

 

 

release the lunatics

from the asylum

let them run,run,run

the whole damn show

 

 

madness is the new sanity

the king has no clothes

doesn’t he look grand

 

 

Lenny Gazbowski

(C) 16.7.2007

— Lenny of Cohen, Jul 16, 2007

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Quillsvein1

19 years ago

agreed

This is a free form call to absolute liberation and is inspiring from the get go. The relativity of "sanity", even the relativity of "madness", everything--you call for a purer madness perhaps, since by all textbook sane standards everything is completely insane. Thought provoking and exciting, though you could use some work on the technical aspects. Great job
LC

Lenny of Cohen

19 years ago

Playtime

Very much appreciated, such positive comments! I will be devoting more time to this piece, and have taken on board your comments. Lenny
weirdelf

weirdelf

19 years ago

this is exciting stuff

but don't the lunatics already run the asylum? I guess quillsvein got it right, it's a call for a purer insanity? As Tom Robbins calls them, the Essential Insanities. cheers, Jess
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Lenny of Cohen

19 years ago

Play Time

Thanks for the positive remarks, again very much appreciated. I shall post the second draft soon. Lenny
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Conect11

19 years ago

ah

you know, Lenny, you already for some reason reminded me of Ken Kesey (who wrote one flew over the cuckoos nest) and now you're reminding me of him again! I like how you usually do quick hit three lines or less stanzas. Makes your impact that much more resonating. Erase the white lines is great. Does it refer to borders? Mark
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Lenny of Cohen

19 years ago

White Lines

Mark, many thanks for your truly positive remarks; and for saying I remind you of Ken Kesey (an honour indeed!). And yes, erase thwhite lines refers to borders! Lenny

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