Proposal 1#

Gently hearing a whistle
Wave’s russling harshly off the sea!
I sit on the sand hoping he thought of me

I see upon distance a form in my midst

It was him! "Eye’s of sky blue"
Brown wavey hair I had a bewildered stare!
He smiled at me,I was thinking of you!

I had to find you,he handed me a gift

"Wait" he insisted before you open it
Know that I love you very much!
I know you love me "he said gently"

I began again to open it an" engagement ring

We embraced in a lavishly longing kiss
I said as you wish!

Robin A Connon

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— blueeyed bettyboop, Jul 14, 2007

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Conect11

17 years 5 months ago

was going back

through the site, and came upon the works you gave, unknowingly flooding the site way back when. Unfortunately because of the time I don't think your work was very well appreciated. That's a shame, because I see a depth and tenderness here that is excited and heartfelt. Mark W.

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