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Spirit Song
Jul 14, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

THE BURNING (Impact Verse)

 

 

TREES FLAME
AMID PRIMAL ECHOING
BEARING WITNESS TO EARTH’S
PLAGUES AND CANCERS
AS THE RAUCOUS WORLD
BURNS

 

 

 

Copyright JVS 2007

 

— Spirit Song, Jul 14, 2007

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A. M. Painter

18 years 11 months ago

very

short and simple, but it shows autacity? i think that is the word i am looking for... no thats not it, that might not even be a word, but still whatever the word i am looking for, this peice has it. a.m. painter
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weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

bearing?

apart from that, a bright angry shout! cheers, Jess
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Spirit Song

18 years 11 months ago

Aloha

Thank you Jess for noticing my misuse of "baring". You are correct it should be "bearing". I shall edit : ) I thank you for your sharing. With Gratitude, Jerry It is said there are two ways of doing things The right way and the wrong way I believe there is a third way A NEW WAY JVS
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kinganeye

18 years 11 months ago

You could have written more

You could have written more and take it so many different directions it reminds me jus a little of poem I have up here called Armgeddon Keep it flowing and keep it growing John
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Spirit Song

18 years 8 months ago

Thank you for your visit

It is said there are two ways of doing things The right way and the wrong way I believe there is a third way A NEW WAY JVS Aloha John,Respectfully, Yes I could have written more : ) The idea with Impact Verse is to pack a punch with as few words as possible. With Gratitide and Blessings from Hawaii, JVS - Spirit Song
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Conect11

18 years 8 months ago

I'm impressed

with the poignancy of this short piece that says everything it needs to say without an ounce of fat. Mark W.
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Spirit Song

18 years 8 months ago

Thank you!

Aloha Mark, Thank you for your visit and kind, supportive sharing. With Gratitude, Jerry It is said there are two ways of doing things The right way and the wrong way I believe there is a third way A NEW WAY JVS