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dicks, drinks, desire.

boogaloo time for one and a half times you can’t say no because you know why we’re here and where we’re going and love shall guide us, or that is or dicks shall guide us into the setting sun.
too far farr away lands we will roam and live and love and drink wine and we cannot see the end of it.
The end of it is only seen when you look deep down into your glass and wonder why we are here and what happens next.
Well, you get another drink, that’s what’s next.
But after that one? Some chose god, wherever he may rear his head, but we have chosen the clear and highly viscous fluid at the core of every beverage we crave. You can only live once.
Well, actually that is a topic of much debate but for now, you can only live once. And don’t think we’re horrible, that philosophy gives us and excuse for the next drink!
Bartender!
So this is what we do.
And this is what we love to do.
Well I mean it has it’s ramifications, but all aside, and that is a big all, we love this.

— HDGoodman, Jul 12, 2007

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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

you

clearly are talented, and I welcome you to neopoet. I'd like to give a personal observation, one not meant with any harshness. A lot of new members post a ton right at the beginning, this is called "flooding." This site has developed into a really great community with many members actively engaging in giving lots of constructive feedback to each other. It's a great place to share poems. With that said, it can be very difficult to give your very good writing the attention it deserves when there are as many posts by the same person on here. Flooding also knocks other users writing off the screen and takes time away from their work. Definately post! But maybe space your postings out more. There's nothing wrong with nine posts in a day for sure, but maybe three at a time so other users can digest your work and post some of their own as well. Again, no malice intended. Hope to see you around posting, and becoming an active part of our community. Mark
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HDGoodman

18 years 11 months ago

yeah sorry...

i noticed that when i was doing it but i figured other people would knok me off soon enough. i'll space them out now, people can't digest anyway when there is too much stuff too soon. thanks for welcoming me, i hope to give and take alot.

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