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Do we ever stop running?
Flash, wait a minute, wait a minute, wait a minute, flash
Unidentifiable things go past
And you’re left
Right
Passive
Unable to fight
Only writhe
And writhe you shall:
Pick up the kids large latte two sugars fill up the gas fear of living alone
Safety
In numbers
If only you could remember the combination
Trapped forever
Divorces are cheap these days
63%
47%
decreasing your load
they used to call you the forklift
you have to spoon feed her now
ninety three on Monday
and that place always smells of urine
but I suppose they can’t help it
who do you know
where are the kids?
Number 93.

— HDGoodman, Jul 12, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

get a title

there is a certain arrogance implied when you won't name a poem. "Untitled" is supremely arrogant, in my opinion, ... is not much better. The poem itself is very good cheers, Jess
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HDGoodman

18 years 11 months ago

"..."

yeah you're right, i just couldn't think of a title there and then, i'll get to it eventually.

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