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She

She is doggedly determined to be right
and doggedly determined to be wise.
She is disconnected,
and her anger is subtle at times.
At times
she is fire,
she is
antithesis.
In the summer
she is tragicomedy.
In autumn
she wilts.
What is her attraction to man?
She is blindsided
and arrogant.
Her movements are restrictive
and her walk is purposeful,
but she has no here to there.
Naive,
that’s what I would call her.
She is doggedly naive
and is fitted with a collar.
In her eyes
she sees freedom,
she has more choices
she
does not think herself gullible,
easily led.
Yet it doesn’t take much.
Just the right amount of inflection,
or the well - timed smile
and she is
without hope
and pathetic.
In the winter she goes back
from here to there more frequently.
She sees nothing,
for nothing is in front of her eyes,
and she has no reason to look
from side to side.
So she thinks.
In her mind
she is a self made heroine,
a leader among her kind.
But she is flappable,
with the smallest resistance.
She is weak
under her velvet facade.
A damaged stone,
tragic as it were.
At times she is spring,
but she has no control of this.
No control; this is her fear,
her misery.
She is misery,
and love less.

        

— Conect11, Jul 12, 2007

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 11 months ago

yes, I know her

many of her, teenage girls this might seem a strange comment but I wonder about our right to even comment on them. They are so self conscious already. Their self-consciousness almost cripples many of them. Political correctness gone too far? It happens. But (I notice I use "but" a lot) political correctness is, I think, one of the most powerful forces for positive social change I have seen in my lifetime. Change the language, change the thought. Now tell me I got the poem entirely wrong. 8) cheers, Jess
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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

close

but in actuallity it is a comment on the feminist movement. (that should get me some hate mail! lol) I will explain later for anyone who wants to eviserate me. Mark
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barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

Some of my favorite people ...

are feminists. Although I'm among the first to admit that the movement can attract some very hard, angry women with tragic personal history and bitter agenda monkeys stuck to their backs. We men can be targets. Sometimes fairly, sometimes not. I prefer the warm feminists, and those who can dialogue---and even laugh along---with me. At the same time being sympathetic to those more wounded. Even when they're more touchy than feely. Thanx for the write, a nice piece of work, Chuck
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Will Searles Carman

18 years 11 months ago

She

Hmm! Something tells me to tread lightly. I found myself unsure, insecure, in settling on an opinion. At times I thought you were expounding about a dog. Then I'd feel another tug, this time toward a kitty. There were other moments when I pictured a sprightly and petite woman/child. I never did come to a final conclusion. The first two uses of 'doggedly' were more effective than the single usage later when a different word choice would have been more effective. Physically, the resulting undulating form was perfect in its suggestion of curves. I like short & simple titles so cheers for that. The theme is fine if relatively common but that's OK, too. No problem with the logic - altogether an apt description of femininity - human, canine or feline.
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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

yours

is a very appreciated and interesting perspective. Another person commented that they thought a dog as well, lol. I agree on the doggedly usage, was feeling that when I wrote it. I'm gonna sit on it for a few days and see how I feel about it then. Thanks for the insightful comment! Mark