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Lunch Break

It was his lunch break
and he came up to his room
he open his door and
his jaw drop to the floor
I laid on his bed
completely nude and bare
I can tell he wanted to
come over but all he can
do is stare
I run my hands down
my chest and slowly
between my thighs
he thinks a dream he
can barely believe his eyes
I tell him to come closer
and lay down by my side
taking off his shirt slowly
before I can unzip his pants
his friend was to hard to hide
while I’m slowly
undress him he can’t keep
his eyes off my every more
I know he can’t want
to put it in me
his tongue play with
my nipples and his hands
moves with my hips
his mouth moves lower
now he kissing my soft lips
a small moan leaves my mouth
and his tongue goes up and down
when something feel so
good its hard not to make
a sound faster and faster
his tongue goes louder and
louder my moans get
he looks up at me
with passion in his eyes
I nod my head yes I want more
I have chill bumps on my
body but he just stand up
and ready to go
I’m so warm and moist
waiting for him to come in
before I can say come
he is ready in about to do
his own thing
so hard and thick it feels
so good when he come in
I clenches the sheets so hard
the pleasure feels amazing
as he quicken his speed
my moan get even louder
faster and faster he go
meeting my every need
before he is finish he whisper
in my ear “I Love You Jasmine”
I know my shit is so good
I even make you fall in love
but all I can say is you only
have 5 min.s until you have
to get back to work see you tonight

 

— sexiiichik411, Jul 12, 2007

Critiques

C

Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

this actually sounds

like a man wrote it, lol! Is that YOU, Joe? The poem itself? Well, welcome to neopoet, I suppose. I could tell you what the "me too!" crowd might, ie., raw, visceral, rough... but you know what? It didn't hit me at all, there was no subtlety to it, there was no build up. It was pornography in the worst sense. Make my heart race if you're going to try and write in this style! Because here my heart did not skip any beats. Mark

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