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SAKTHEEE2007
Jul 11, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

a rain in a summer day

A RAIN IN A SUMMER DAY

A RAIN IN A SUMMER DAY
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IT IS TOO HOT AND BURNING MY FACE
THOUGH I WEAR THE GLASS AND HAT
NOTHING COOLS ME EVEN A TREE CNNOT DO
MY TRAVEL CONTINUES HOURS TOGETHER

SWEATING AND IRRITATION IN MY EYES
PREVENT ME TO TRAVEL FURTHER
I CROSSED AND STOPPED MY TRAVEL UNDER A TREE
SECONDS HAVE GONE.
CLOUDS ENCROACHES THE COMPLETE SKY
GENTLE WIND BLOWS ON MY SWEAT AND ON MY FACE

FEW DROPS OF WATER FROM THE SKY FALLS
A SILVER LINE RUSHES ACROSS THE SKY
I FEEL THE HEAVEN AT THAT MOMENT
A HEAVY RAIN FALLS TO WET THE LAND
THE EARTH GETS COOL AS MY BODY AND MIND

SAKTHI RAVICHANDRAN
AN INDIAN ENGLISH POET

— SAKTHEEE2007, Jul 11, 2007

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barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

Sweet

And of course I have a tooth for sweet. Thanx again, Chuck, aka Grandpa
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SAKTHEEE2007

18 years 11 months ago

SHARING

Grandpa, Iam Ravi writting this I am an Indian the boundaries will not affect our affection my nation and culture is having a strong back ground.My residence place is Kanchipuram such a historical place which is also famous for silk sarees and artistic work in silk cloths they are weaved in human hands. nice sculptures and tall and beautiful temples are here to visit and enjoy please disclose your national heritage and towns beauty to share our thoughts via mail thank you grandpa RAVI
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barbsdad2003

18 years 11 months ago

Ravi:

I live in the Detroit metro area. On my mother's side is all English. My father's side is half Irish, half Dutch. I guess that makes me a mongrel of sorts. My favorite state in the U.S. is Oregon, where I spent a great many years. And in fact was born there. About once a year I go to Puerto Rico for a short stay. The picture in my profile was taken there. I wrestle daily with diabetes. I usually win by a pin. Other than that particular stalking ghost, my health is formidable---that is to say beyond excellent. If you want, click on Private Messages in the white list of titles on black background to the right of this page. Send me a note including your email. We can correspond further either that way ... or directly through Private Messages here. Yours, Grandpa
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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

well

I do have to agree with Jess on the caps, but looking past that what I find remarkable is that even though you struggle to find all of the right words your poems come across so vivedly and tender. I wish that I could speak your native tongue so that I could see this poem exactly as you envision it in your head. I wish I could be more constructive, Sakthee, but I must judge your work on its intellect and compassion, more than on the mere technicalities of grammar, spelling, and language. And your gentleness, compassion, and wisdom shine through beautifully. Mark
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SAKTHEEE2007

18 years 11 months ago

THANK YOU GRANDPA

Dear Grandpa In Indian relationships grandpa and grandma are lovly relations to kids .Yes they are the inspirers of our imagination and to our creativity They gave our parents and They are the boss of a joint family,they are the guides of the families too But unfortunately I lost my grand ma and grand pa at my age of 2 years. So I felt and realise the value of grand ma and grand pa Here I pray the ALMIGHTY for you to give all good health wealth, and peace in life, glee in rest sound sleep . My mother Goddess Kanchi Kamakkshi amman will take care of you with prayers and love SAKTHI