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sublimation

 

 

stirring coffee with a spoon

watching the whirling storm

within the cup

 

so close are we

yet distant still

as Saturns moons

dusted

cloaked

in softness

 

comfort in your voice

sedations in your words

sweep by me

mesmerize me

 

i’ll never take

that guess again

 

but step closer

with baited breath

 

the opened door

 

..O..

— orgami, Jul 10, 2007

Critiques

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stardream

18 years 11 months ago

orgami

i would just like to say i am really enjoying reading your work for the first time thismorning. i especially like the peacefulness and calmness your writing conveys. from stardream
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Conect11

18 years 11 months ago

cotton

this reminds me of sleeping on a big pile of cotton, and I'm loving it. Great flow, mojo, you know? Mark

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