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Shittyhawk

Come on, cruise into our lives.

Stirring up strife, like stirring up sediment from the bottom of the harbour.

Emptying your hull of short back n’side.

Dipping your rusty metal inot our pristine harbour.

I’ve walked past your expanse everyday you’ve been here.

Is 2mil a day from a 2faced allie worth it?

Can’t wait to see the back of you passing through the heads.

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I wonder how many Americans

can appreciate how violated we feel having your military presence in our country. Even though you are supposed allies we trust you as far as we could throw an air-craft carrier. You have turned on us before. Really appreciate this poem. An elegant truth. cheers, Jess
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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

you know

I will comment on both the poem and the comment. I have often wonder why we have bases in sovereign nations, especially given I have never seen a base from any other country here in the U.S. I never really considered the feeling of being violated, but when you say that it makes worlds of sense. FM, the poem is biting in its honesty, and brutal in the feelings it stirred up. Namely guilt, and dismay over not being informed in the slightest of the things going on outside our borders except what we're spoon fed. Mark
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

18 years 10 months ago

war

Mark, thankyou for your honesty. I am a painter of war, namely Gallipoli. How do you paint war especially one that has been over for 90 years. When i saw the Kittyhawk for the first time I was aghast and all these emotions stirred up inside of me and had to come out. I believe now that i should't just stick to one war, that i need to paint all of them. Fleur
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A. M. Painter

18 years 10 months ago

well

i am an american, and i am patriotic and all that crap, but i do feel that we try to control the world, and we say its for overall peace, but hey, we cause more harm than good, it happens a.m.painter
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

Not really

I have just gotten older. Have you laid your eyes on the USS Kittyhawk? Fleur thanyou for reading
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Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

No I haven't

I can't imagine how huge it must have looked in the harbour, or the feeling of menace. But your poem is I think maybe the best one of yours that I have read. I find it tight and uncompromising, really excellant. Love. Craig
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

Roughly 5000 crew

Thanks mate, but wait until you have read all of them as I am going through yours, I do drop off for bits when I need to finish paintings but I'm writing again so that's a good sign. And I'm as glad as a lizard is flat out drinking that you like my work. love fleur
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Skumpfsklub

16 years 11 months ago

Yeah, it's a big sucker, ain't it?

Vessel has been stationed in San Diego a couple of times; although I haven't verified it, I think it's STILL stationed here, formally. When it's moored here, I don't notice it much. I'm five miles away and on the other side of a mesa, so if I want to be annoyed, I have to make a special effort. Aircraft carriers in San Diego Harbor are . . . ubiquitous. We even keep a 'pet aircraft carrier'--USS MIdway--afloat for use as a museum and tourist trap. The tours are conducted by ancient sailors who are scandalously still alive, and still pleased with their accomplishments in WWII. About stationing CVN's in foreign ports, particularly yours. Talk to the P. M. If you can convince him to tell the president to park his navy elsewhere, I believe the Kittyhawk would shortly be ordered to up anchor and sail away. And isn't it wonderful that foreign policy is made just that way? Sadly, the pacific are hardly ever the makers of foreign policy. It's the surlier types--i.e., those idiots elected most recently, and those jackasses elected before them. Or it's tyrants. Because your poem is so very highly effective in conveying your outrage, I do in some degree feel how deeply the presence in your home of armed outlanders must offend you who are opposed to arms, force, and all the other happy hobbies of warriors. There is much in the business of war that wounds the eye, stings the nose, or otherwise disgusts. I stay home on Veterans' Day, and wait until it passes. I don't like having my nose rubbed in error. But I had a point to make: yes, you are outraged; tell your government so--and I assure you, I will show support at this end. Kittyhawk can get anywhere it's needed, eventually. And, as I said, the boat doesn't upset my stomach.
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 11 months ago

Man that was

probably the best comment yet. But sadly I'm too late to tell my PM anything. the shittyhawk dropped anchor in our pristine harbour in July 2007 for a fleeting visit of 5 days, the crew were even told no one was to be seen on land in uniform, but it wasn't hard to pick them in there civies. We were told it was on it's last voyage and it was a farewell to australia, whoopie do!!! I'm also a bit annoyed that I didn't have a working camera so I couldn't make a dartboard out of a photo of it. But it was terribly interesting to look at and I tried in vain to get on board during the public tours but no such luck. And living close to the harbour it did feel alittle too close for comfort. And seeing Australia is suppose to be a friendly all is welcome kind of place it is a bit rich for a ruddy great big grey floating turd to cross my path. Farewell Shittyhawk hope you find a nice bit of the ocean floor for your retirement. and thankyou Skumpfsklub for your wonderful comment. write on Fleur